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| Image courtesy of Tokyo5 |
Big Poem
Haiku says, “When big,
I want more lines of seven,
just like Tanka has.”
Tanka (his big sis)
tells Haiku that there are much
bigger things in life
than just seven syllables.
Haiku replies, “What? Like eight?”
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Bad Meal
The dinner was served.
It was really terrible.
No second helping.
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I love your commentary between Haiku and Tanka. Super fun.
ReplyDeleteI adore this. The interaction between the Haiku and Tanka...perfection!
ReplyDeleteRJ...this is brilliant. It reminds me of my two boys squabbling about...well about everything! Just can't say LOVE enough about this one. Brilliant!!!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the haiku/tanka dialogue... very clever!
ReplyDeleteRJ!
ReplyDeleteThat first poem - duet is wonderful. fun, true, smart.
The dinner thing... Oh I have cooked more than a few like that!
RJ - love the haiku versus tanka competition. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed a chuckle over the no second helps.
You pieces are always so witty and clever...love them both..bkm
ReplyDeleteLoved your take on Haiku and Tanka arguing! The second one also reminds me of the old joke about the two old ladies in the Catskills resort restaurant.
ReplyDeleteLady 1: "The food here is really terrible."
Lady 2: "Yes, and the portions are so small!"
Loved your takes! Amy
What I love about coming here is that not only do you laugh a lot but learn a lot too.
ReplyDeleteLoved them both, especially your conversation piece. It's always a pleasure to visit and find out what you are offering up this time.
ReplyDeleteI don't know about Tanka so will look it up today. Your poems are delightful. I love humorous Haiku. Nice to meet you! hugs, pat
ReplyDeleteHow do you get your head around these mathematical rules and still make me smile? A big, big brain! Jae
ReplyDeleteYour poetry often speaks to me, but never before as dialog. I love this.
ReplyDeleteI love your poem. It is not only a commentary on Haiku and Tanka, but of how little kids compete!
ReplyDeleteI will come back for more!
CM - tanks so much! ☼
ReplyDeletehoneyhaiku - thanks so much for your kind words!
ReplyDeleteElaine - thanks! As soon as I saw the prompt of 'big' I thought of siblings and the haiku/tanka combo just followed.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth J - thanks!!!
ReplyDeleteKim - thanks - and yeah, I know what you mean! haha!
ReplyDeleteLisa - thank you so much!!!
ReplyDeletebkm - aw...you are so sweet! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteAmy - thanks! And LOL!
ReplyDeleteOld Egg - wow! Thanks! ☼
ReplyDeleteOld Altonian - thank you! The feeling is mutual!
ReplyDeletePat - thank you - and nice to meet you too!
ReplyDeleteJaeRose - you know - it's just fun! That's what I try to go for when I write. So, thanks!
ReplyDeleteWow - Mike! That is just about the coolest thing you could have said to me! Wow (again!)
ReplyDeleteMeryl - thank you! And glad you liked it.
ReplyDeletewhat a fun take on Big..
ReplyDeletesmiles.