Thursday, January 19, 2012

A Thin Veneer

Image courtesy of paintingsilove

Veneer

To say goodbye is difficult:
I want more time.  That’s one result.
Another is my sense of fear.
My face is but a thin veneer.

So, au revoir, auf wiedersehen.
Our memories are what remain.
My cheerful smile is not sincere.
My face is but a thin veneer.

You wave your hand and I’ll wave mine.
We’ll tell each other we’ll be fine
since hope will always persevere.
My face is but a thin veneer.

To say goodbye is difficult:
My face is but a thin veneer.

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Notes:  Once again, the form I chose to use is Kyrielle Sonnet.  The idea for the poem was inspired by Poets United Thursday Think Tank, whose prompt word is 'goodbyes.'

21 comments:

  1. What an interesting form. I like the repetitive line of "thin veneer". Very well done ~

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  2. good words. true words. it IS hard to say goodbye.

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  3. Beautiful form - clearly delineated concepts of a profound message - that you could serve well with more of the accompanying illustration to be a children's book along the lines of the Little Prince. Bravo !

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  4. Thoughtful content, interesting form.

    Beautifully done.

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  5. You hone your skill with the form in this one, RJ.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/14/letting-go/

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  6. I can connect to this poem so well. I always attempt to hide my true feelings when they are difficult.

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  7. nicely done to form...goodbye is one of my least favorite things to say....

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  8. Dear Heaven - thank you so much!

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  9. Magnolia - boy, ain't that the truth!

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  10. Pearl - thank you so much! St. Exupery is one of my absolute favorites (having read Le Petit Prince back in the day!)

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  11. How beautiful!

    And thanks so much for your fun contributions to last week's Limerick-Off!

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  12. RJ,
    I have always loved your poetry on the Poetic Asides site. I am happy to find you here with such a beautiful poem in a perfect form.

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  13. Thanks so much for your encouragement, Kim!

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  14. Marita - I think, at least to some extent, we all do. It's a coping thing, right?

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  15. Thanks, Madeleine - you totally rock!

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  16. Brian - goodbye is generally my least favorite thing to say too,

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  17. Sara - thanks so much! I wish you left a link for your site so I could visit and see what you've been writing!

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  18. Sara - disregard the last comment - I found you! Cool!

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